Halo Cartoon: Semi-SouthPark Style [Feedback Please]
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Halo Cartoon: Semi-SouthPark Style [Feedback Please]
I have really changed the look of the Southpark character. I would like any feedback that anybody could give. What can I do to make it look better?
Consistancy: a good style is consistent. But your eyes are too different from the rest of the character,
they look like plastic toy eyes glued on paper.
Indifference: right now you're halfways between a cutout and a drawn character. I think a clear decision
for one of them would be better, and personally I'd go to the drawn side, as AS is so good at that.
Colours: have a look with half closed eyes. Can you recognise any element on the first pose? A good
colour scheme is always a bit "functional": different colours for skin, cloth, mittens, visor, additional
stuff on suit. Right now you have odd pairings, whis means the same colour for:
- boots and knee protectors and buckles
- mittens and shoulder patches and visor and breathing filters
- helmet and suit
Face: how old is your character, and why is the head a nearly perfect circle? I think you should go
further away from South Park. Look at the nose: it's a shape without outline in profile, but a thin line
in frontal view. How would you do a 3/4 view? Why are the ears missing? The face is flat, why are there
no shadows under eyebrows and nose?
I leave you with that right now. Additional tip: if you're still searching for a good design, don't just
change small parts. Get paper and pencil and make really big changes. Hold on to the concept
of cut-out simplicity while not falling for the same look as SP. Final thought: how does the world
look like in which your character lives? Good character design always tests for good readability
in front of different BGs while still matching style.
they look like plastic toy eyes glued on paper.
Indifference: right now you're halfways between a cutout and a drawn character. I think a clear decision
for one of them would be better, and personally I'd go to the drawn side, as AS is so good at that.
Colours: have a look with half closed eyes. Can you recognise any element on the first pose? A good
colour scheme is always a bit "functional": different colours for skin, cloth, mittens, visor, additional
stuff on suit. Right now you have odd pairings, whis means the same colour for:
- boots and knee protectors and buckles
- mittens and shoulder patches and visor and breathing filters
- helmet and suit
Face: how old is your character, and why is the head a nearly perfect circle? I think you should go
further away from South Park. Look at the nose: it's a shape without outline in profile, but a thin line
in frontal view. How would you do a 3/4 view? Why are the ears missing? The face is flat, why are there
no shadows under eyebrows and nose?
I leave you with that right now. Additional tip: if you're still searching for a good design, don't just
change small parts. Get paper and pencil and make really big changes. Hold on to the concept
of cut-out simplicity while not falling for the same look as SP. Final thought: how does the world
look like in which your character lives? Good character design always tests for good readability
in front of different BGs while still matching style.