My very first AS Studio animation!

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al
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My very first AS Studio animation!

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Hey Everyone, check out my animation. It's called--Damien's Ending.

hit me with some feed back, let me know what ya'll honestly think.

here is the link...

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aNGPYZNv ... re=related
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Nits but no reasons for them:

1) Clouds and birds don't start moving until the pan backwards is complete -- as if the director then yelled "action!". Really weird and amaturish looking.

2) Hand passes through frame in first photo holding

3) It's kind of odd that Damien's entire head changes shape when only his eyebrows and/or eyes should move to reflect his sadness -- it made me laugh.

4) I think I'd cut out most of the black and let the narration carry over into the bar door scene ("his search may have just begun"). That black just slows everything up.

Otherwise I like the animation. Can't say I care much for the theme or writing, but I'm sort of the "life is pretty wonderful" kind of guy and have a hard time understanding why anyone wants to spend time creating things that don't reflect that.
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