This is quite funny and charming; it was almost like watching a madlibs story. The narration is strong. I'd only suggest more character animation - assuming that the heavy use of teleports is designed to avoid character animation. :P I don't think it needs a ton of character movement, but you could add a short animation sequence here and there when it serves the story. A cut out Monty Python style animation could be a good fit since you're already using photographs for props and backgrounds.